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Re: EMO, UNITE! FORM OF: THREAD!
Are HIM emo?
Jan 10, 2006 -
Re: EMO, UNITE! FORM OF: THREAD!
Heck no! Anyway. Guys in eyeliner are hot. Like the guy from MCR. And some of the music is pretty good.
Jan 10, 2006 -
Re: What should i call my birdy?
Is it a boy or a girl? That's important.
Jan 6, 2006 -
Re: He spotted
"I'm sorry," she muttered. "I don't know what came over me." "it's quite alright," he replied, captivated by her gentle sincerity as she offered him a tissue. "Maybe after I've ...
Jan 6, 2006 -
Re: Something's Wonderin'
This seems a little...sloppy. There's no structure, which is fine, as it's free verse, anything goes. It just didn't sound like it flowed in my head. However. The first line ...
Jan 6, 2006 -
Re: Mirror/Bittersweet Goodnight
Mirror: Some lines are a little longer, some are shorter, so I feel this doesn't flow very well. You say "Her imperfections linger/Before her drop-dead gorgeous frown." So even her ...
Jan 6, 2006 -
Re: Snowlgobe
I'm picking up on things here that you may or may not have intentionally touched on. Fore example: "Where snow always fell". It always fell, did it? Was the boy ...
Jan 6, 2006 -
Re: Dreams- please review
Well it's catchy. At the moment it seems little more than an outlet of angst, which I don't begrudge you, I do it often. But if you want to improve ...
Jan 6, 2006 -
Re: Timezones
Useful website :)
Jan 6, 2006 -
Re: One Body
Ooh, I like. You touch on a feeling of unity, and I think you could develop that more-is this a romantic unity? Or am I just in a romantic mood? ...
Jan 4, 2006 -
Re: The Truth
This left me confused. I didn't find it particularly easy to read, and got confused as to whether you want to talk or you want answers. Or do you want ...
Jan 4, 2006 -
Re: The Precariously Perched Pidgeon
Ditto Snoink, I wasn't sure about that line either, it was kind of hard for me to get my head around. Apart from that, I like this very much. It's ...
Jan 4, 2006 -
Re: Fantasies Of Being Numb In The Night
The walls are sweating. Anticipation breathes, Rustles the curtains with Its moist breath. Darkness never falls, it jumps- It’s the light that dives, Limbs spread, crashing simultaneously Into the o
Jan 4, 2006 -
Re: What should i call my birdy?
Jack Sparrow :D Jack or Sparrow for short.
Jan 2, 2006 -
Re: Things You Love
He's beautiful :D:D:D
Jan 1, 2006
